Persistently low lab values vs persistent low lab values?
From the clarification of the question, the problem is to describe a group of patients typified by those satisfy columns 1, 3, and 4 in the first table below
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Start 6 months
A B A B
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low normal low normal
low low low normal
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but which excludes others such as those in the second table:
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Start 6 months
A B A B
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low normal low high
normal low low normal
low low low high
low low low low
low low normal normal
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This can be described as:
The group in which the level of peptide A remained low for 6 months and the level of peptide B was normal after 6 months.
and in writing this up in a report it would seem necessary to state it precisely in this or a very similar form.
The question is what to do if you have to refer repeatedly to such a group. A construct like “persistent low levels of peptide A-only” is clumsy, ugly and imprecise as it does not include the second condition regarding peptide B. I cannot imagine a phrase that embodies both conditions and would therefore second the suggestion made by @terdon to define them with code names — Group A, Group I, Hypo-A, or whatever.
Gentle suggestions from an old-timer
- Diagram or tabulate your problem to explain it. It may also help you explain it to yourself.
- Scientific language is difficult because precision is paramount and this often means using words that are not in everyday use. However when you can use a simple English word, do so. There is nothing clever about replacing plain English by long latinate words.
- Avoid strings of adjectival nouns (e.g. the ugly and clumsy suggestion of “persistent Peptide A-only-decrease”) by the simple expedient of a preposition. “Of” is not a four-letter word. You may have to use such combinations in the column headings of a table, but that doesn’t mean you need to use them in the text.
- If you think this will make the sentence too long, you probably need to divide it in two.
- Make your own decisions on style on the basis of reading clarity — don’t just blindly follow the majority.
- As a scientist use a precise term such as “concentration” or “amount”, rather than the aqueous “level”.