Design Critique Needed ( VLAN & ESXi )
You have done this absolutely correctly! It appears to me also that you're using Juniper switching based on the format of your interfaces.
Recommendations:
Make sure you set MTU of 9216 on the Juniper switch for any port carrying iSCSI. Equallogic likes jumbo frames. You should set ALL the links from the switch to your ESXi systems as trunks, carrying the appropriate VLANs, this gives you flexibility.
Finally, install the Dell flavored version of ESXi so it has the open manage and systems health plugins, and afterwards install the Dell multi-pathing plug-in for ESXi and let it create your iSCSI vswitch for you, this makes sure that the vswitch, and in turn each vmnick and vmkernel port all are set correctly for jumbo frames.
Remember also how vmware blocksizes affect the datastores on your SAN, typically unless there is a requirement we create a datastore with a 1MB block size, but this limits you to a VMDK of like 512GB or something like that I can't remember, a 2MB block size will let you do 2TB VM's, and so on. (I can't remember the figures).
@SpacemanSpiff has put some good recommendations out there, a couple things to add:
I don't see any notes on which interface the VMware HA communication will be using. By default it'll probably grab the management interface, which should be fine; it's not a lot of traffic. But make sure you're aware of which interface it's using; if, for instance, you added a host on a different vlan for management but the same VMotion and FT vlans, then the HA cluster wouldn't accept that host.
Not sure what kind of physical NICs you've got, but I'd recommend making sure a given vSwitch has uplinks using multiple physical NICs, so a card failure can't bring you down. So, for instance if you've got 2x 4-port NICs, then instead of doing management with vmnic1 and vmnic2, do it on 1 and 5.