A hard to understand paragraph [closed]
How can the bolded part of the following text be expressed in the simple language?
While the principals are a cut above this level of qualification the incompetence of the American government to do business requires a rethinking on our part of why there have been so many frustrating failures to deliver on their part.
Here's a critique rather than a solution
- There are too many (potential) clauses in the sentence. Target each sentence to make one point, and one point only.
- The "rethinking on our part" is vague. What rethinking is required? Or alternatively, what was the thinking or expectation going in, and what should have been the thinking/expectation in hindsight?
- "On their part" should not be required once you are clear on 2.
Hope that helps!